[CIMC-work] text for Garth/Iraq feature: need edit, please

[Chris Kaihatsu]

On 4/10/04 9:12 PM, "Garth Liebhaber" <garthliebhaber at care2.com> wrote:

> Hi gang!
> 
> okay! finally, here's the basic story block for fundraiser
> feature.  need people to look at at edit/give advice on
> wording.  if you want, just post changes as comment.  it is
> here, complete in html:
> 
> http://chicago.indymedia.org/newswire/display/39595/
> index.php
> 
> 
> I am working on my bio/statement right now along with
> an article showing the select  images peops can donate
> for.
> 
> totally open for suggestions,,
> 
> thanks,
> garth
> 
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Garth, CIMC,

Your copy looks fine, except:

- I don't think the word 'delegate' is the right word. How about
"photojournalist"?

- Also, if you could jazz it up just a little, I think it might grab the
reader's attention a little better. I like the copy Emily came up with in
her recent CIMC brochure....


Chris K.




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44 percent of the American people want US troops brought home now.
wsws.org/articles/2004/apr2004/iraq-a10.shtml

"I call upon the American people to stand beside their brethren, the Iraqi
people, who are suffering an injustice by your rulers and the occupying
army, to help them in the transfer of power to honest Iraqis."  Muqtada Sadr

The press constantly harps on the theme of the danger of civil war (between
Sunnis and Shiites). The reason for this is clear: it is meant to justify
the continued occupation of Iraq. "If we withdraw, there will be civil war!"
they say. What they do not say is that they have been constantly playing up
the differences between different religious and national groups in order to
increase their own power and present themselves as the arbiter between them.
www.marxist.com/MiddleEast/insurrection_in_iraq.html