[Seattle-editorial]Feature Proposal Seattle Protesters

[Gentry Lange]

Here's my pass at a front page version of your story. Since this is your
first proposal to the collective, I'll offer a few reasons for this version.

-First I cut down on the commentary and tried to get the guts of the
story.... News format is generally to tell the story in the first 35 words,
then fill in the details from there. There's a lot of inflammatory/directed
speech in you proposal that I would steer clear of for the front page. We
can link to the unedited story from the front page.

-2nd, links are great, I'll look some up as I can tonight to add as well.
Linking to local news stories about Norm Maleng, Nordstrom, etc. buying
influence stuff like that would be great.

--3rd we should link to story(s) about free speech zones, something to
support the story. Who said these free speech zones are going to exist?

Ok so here's my proposed edit--
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Title: Free Speech Zones
Subtitle: Censorship and Big Brother Coming to Town

Bellevue protesters will be restricted to "Free Speech Zones" during Dubya's
visit to the Northwest this weekend. The free speech rally will take place
at NE 8th and Bellevue Way on August 23, 2003.

Reportedly, Bush will be nowhere near the free speech zone, and will instead
be hobnobbing with the local super-rich, including Craig and Susan McCaw at
their Mansion at 3858 Hunts Point Road in Medina.

At 11:30 AM on the 23rd, Bush will be asking for more cash at a gathering
with such noted contributors to the new regime as Norm Maleng, Jim and John
Nordstrom and a host of other wealthy contributors.




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Hi all,

Here is my second attempt at a proposal:

Is there a format for noting at the top that this is an "opinion" or
"commentary"? Would that be the subtitle at the top?

I think the title: "Seattle protesters are hoodwinked" works well.

I cleaned up what typos I found in the text below and noted where I think a
break should be to a hyperlink to the rest of the text. It would also be
nice if we had a bio on the Reverend for the end. (Reverend?) I would also
suggest a hyperlink to Hunts Point Road for description and directions on
how to get to the protests there.


>
> Seattle protesters are hoodwinked into believing they will stop George
> W. Bush at the August 23, 2003 rally at N/E 8th and Bellevue Way.
>
> While in truth, George Bush will be spending his time dining and
> laughing at the protesters in their little designated "Free Speech ZONE"
> while the rest of America is declared a "Bush ONLY" Speech Zone.
>
> No George will not hear the cries of freedom, but instead be hobnobbing
> with the sleazy likes of Craig and Susan McCaw at there Mansion at 3858
> Hunts Point Road in Medina. At 11:30 AM on the 23rd, Bush will be
> asking for more "cash" at a gathering with such noted contributors to
> the new regime as Norm Maleng, Jim and John Nordstrom and a host of
> other wealthy contributors. As these business tycoons and hangers on
> look to buy influence and curry favor with the dictatorial and
> unpatriotic Bush regime.
>
> At 12:00 noon, these patrons of the right will be sitting down to a fine
> meal and drinks, while the majority of Americans are worrying about how
> to feed their families, or if they will still have a job next week; and
> of course our protesters will be quietly demonstrating far away in their
> designated "Free Speech ZONE."


Hyperlink to rest of text below:


> >From the beginnings of Freedom in this land, from a time before even the
> ink was dry on the Constitution, demonstrations have been for the people
> to express their ideas, and protest the decisions of those who make the
> decisions; to appeal directly to our representatives for redress of
> wrongs, and to right injustice. George Bush has closed off the only
> methods that the average people have of letting the Presidency of the
> United States know what it is that a majority of Americans are concerned
> about. White House mail is routinely thrown away, E-mail is censored
> and divided into those who approve, and those who don't, and only
> supporters are allowed to place a sign or voice an opinion in front of
> King George. The majority of Americans are ushered in to "free speech"
> pens, or small gathering sites far from where our representatives are
> gathered or will see and hear.
>
> It seems to this activist, that if the People of America want Bush to
> understand that we will not allow our civil liberties and FREEDOMS to be
> taken away, we need to stand and defend them. America needs those
> people and activists who will stand glaringly in the sight of the
> wrongdoers and peacefully say "WE WILL NOT GO AWAY," WE WILL NOT BE
> RELEGATED AND ENSLAVED, WE WILL ASSEMBLE, WE WILL MARCH, AND WE DEMAND
> EQUAL RIGHTS." Yes I said EQUAL RIGHTS, for this is an EQUAL rights
> issue. Just as Martin Luther King Jr. demanded equal rights for African
> Americans, and as Susan B Anthony demanded Equal Rights for Women, so to
> must we demand Equal rights for All Americans, not just the Rich, or the
> Privileged, or the Republican Right wing.
>
> Our rally cry should be "AMERICA IS A FREE SPEECH ZONE." For without
> Free Speech, America is doomed. The Right control more than 90% of the
> media distribution, and with the media cut off from us, now we have the
> streets taken as well.
>
> So let the cry go fourth, let us take back America, in the name of the
> Majority, and the Minorities, in the names of the oppressed and the
> forgotten, the homeless, the veterans, the mothers, the sons and
> daughters.
>
> Let us rally in peace and freedom, let us march to Mr. Bush and demand
> EQUALITY! Freedom can not be taken from those willing to defend it, and
> that truth is witnessed by those who died at Iwo Jima, at Normandy, at
> Gettysburg, in the Civil rights Marches of the sixties, and by all those
> who refused to give in to tyranny.
>
> If Bush has a problem with Freedom, let him move to Saudi Arabia, or
> China, but while any true American yet breathes, the fight to keep and
> make America Free must go on. Do not go peacefully into the chains of
> slavery; do not bow to the dictators of tyranny. Stand tall stand proud
> for FREEDOM, for the future, for America and our children.
>
> Written by:
> Reverend Allyn Llyr

Bio needed.






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